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Some people think history has little or nothing to offer, while others say the study of the past helps us understand the present.

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History
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 is not a useful
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 in people's daily lives, which means getting extra time.
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 historical information gives humanity an enormous amount of database for different fields of life.
History
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 is not an important
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at
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 schools and universities. Events that are happening in the past do not have any influence on the present or future. Historical occasions like the
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 World Wars are not significant nowadays and
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 will not be in the future.
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, learning
history
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universities, colleges, and schools leads to a lack of time for
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other important
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subject
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. Historical materials are difficult to understand and really complex to memorize. So learning
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 can be a result of the extra information in the student's brain, which will not be useful in
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 future.
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history
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 can be significant for the different fields of the present. From
history
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, humanity can take a lot of beneficial data for their development.
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, historical information gives the people of the whole world knowledge about trading, cultural heritage, and medicine and helps us to understand the structure of society. From the historical landmark, individuals learn about the cultures of other nations, which can offer them
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an understanding
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about
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 certain fields of daily life or science and introduce them to their own country.
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, increasing economic and political attitudes between countries.
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, I think
history
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 is the valuable heritage of every nation, and historical knowledge gives humanity major benefits and can be the reason for the country's development.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph supports a clear, single idea. For instance, your paragraphs discuss multiple ideas, sometimes making it difficult to follow. Group related ideas together for better clarity.
task achievement
Include more relevant specific examples to support your points. For example, providing instances of historical events that directly inform present-day practices can strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Work on improving the logical flow of your essay. Transition words and phrases can help connect ideas more effectively, enhancing the reader’s ability to follow your argument.
task achievement
Good attempt at addressing both sides of the argument, providing a balanced view, which is essential for a higher score in task response.
coherence cohesion
Clear introduction and conclusion that bookend your essay well. These are important for a high score in coherence and cohesion.
overall
Some complex sentences are used effectively, demonstrating a good grasp of written English.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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