The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Both presented line graphs provide information on cellular and landline subscriptions in four different countries over a ten-year period.
Overall
, it is obvious that the popularity of the two memberships had generally remained constant in all nations for all periods. Approximately just under 4 per hundred people
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subscribed to cellphone or fixed phone services in Eritrea between 2005 and 2015, with the cabled category being a little less popular by 2009. The average amount of wireless phone users in the UK has been commonly stable, it
was gaining
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attention from 2005 to 2010,
then
remained at nearly the same level until 2015, with about 125 members per hundred nationals. A similar situation happened with the UK customers of landline telephones. The interest stood at approximately the same measure for the total amount of time with a downward tendency, around 55 members per hundred citizens. People of Uruguay were regularly uninterested in the use of home phones,
whereas
they had the largest mainstream increase in cellular phone popularity. In 2005 there were about 40 per hundred citizens having mobile devices, after that the number of
overall
cellphone service usage rocketed and was more than three times the original quantity by 2015.
Similarly
to that, the Indians started to pay attention to mobile communication in 2007.
Following
this
, the number of subscribers was increasing and culminated at just above 75 per hundred nationals.
However
, the Indians were not fond of wired telephone services for the whole time.
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