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There are debates about
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of
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in providing information about current decades.
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we can explain our modern
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through
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history
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the history
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of evolution, it may not be supportable in modern occupations or provide exact information.
History
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could be necessary
in
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explanation
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the explanation
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of
evolution
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the evolution
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our
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devloped
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developed
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as well as
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society,since there is a link between past and current
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centres
that can be noticed in historical
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that are extremally used in
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explorers allow us to learn
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history
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of not only ancient periods but
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current
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through
evolution
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the evolution
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of human
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beings
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.
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, through historical artefacts and
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travellers
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travelers
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travelers,
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we know how we start to communicate with each other and
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with
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citizens.
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knowledges allow us to understand why and how we have
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life
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, there used to be explorers
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whose studies
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as about
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the universe
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or the Earth based nowadays
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researchs
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research
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theories of Galileo Galilei and Newton about gravity are
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applied
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exloration
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exploration
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outter
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outer
space in
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NASA and similar organizations.
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learning
history
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has a
signifficant
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significant
role in understanding our
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by using artefacts.
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in already known
fiels
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fields
history
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is essential, it may not be applied in brand new occupations
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.
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industries tend to make
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analyses
based on modern society rather
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than something
ancinbt and not relevant.
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, when 21st
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century
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do research, they concentrate on our citizens.
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coherence cohesion
Your main ideas are apparent, but the essay lacks a clear introduction and conclusion. Aim to structure your essay with an introductory paragraph that clearly outlines your thesis and a conclusion that summarizes your main points.
coherence cohesion
Work on improving the logical structure of the essay. Each paragraph should have a clear topic sentence that introduces the main idea, followed by supporting sentences that expand on it.
task achievement
Be mindful of grammar and spelling errors. Proofreading your text can help minimize mistakes and improve your overall score.
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While your examples are relevant, ensure they are clearly tied to your main ideas. This can help strengthen your arguments.
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Your essay addresses the topic and provides a complete response, discussing both the supportive and opposing views.
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You have included relevant and specific examples, such as Galileo Galilei and Newton, to illustrate your points.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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