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The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. Do you agree or disagree

#week #workers #weekend
Nowadays it is essential for workers
spend
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 much time
to rest
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 and developing their skills The working
days
better
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 to be short and
employees
 should have long
weekend
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weekends
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.
this
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 essay agrees that
government
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the government
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 should reduce working
day
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days
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 and give
employees
few
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a few
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days
 off for many reasons that I will discuss. Reducing
employees
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employee's
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 hours
lead
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leads
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 to reduce the
wage
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wages
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 they receive. If the government make
this
as
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a law, that will be respective
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,in China the
employees
 spend much time
in
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on
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week
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weekdays
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days
 rather than working
week
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weeks
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 and
its
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it
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lead
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leads
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 them
work
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to work
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 hard
also
 rely on a consistent of funds. The
employees
 save their
times
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time
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 and develop their skills that encourage them to be successful in their
position
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positions
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.
For
instance
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 when people have enough time to rest they will have
energy
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the energy
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 to work harder.
To conclude
,I agree with
mitigate
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mitigating
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 work
days
 and making
weekend
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weekends
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 longer for many reasons.
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Try to develop your introduction more fully. Explain briefly why rest and skill development are essential in the initial paragraph.
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Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main point and is developed with specific examples and explanations.
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The essay provides a clear opinion on the topic, which is maintained throughout.
coherence and cohesion
The conclusion clearly sums up your opinion on the topic.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • productivity
  • burnout
  • motivation
  • mental well-being
  • work-life balance
  • job satisfaction
  • pollution levels
  • traffic congestion
  • consumer spending
  • economic implications
  • leisure and service sectors
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