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Band 3

In some countries university students live at home with their family while they study, whereas in other countries students attend university in another city. Do you think the benefits of living away from home during university outweigh the disadvantages?

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There is no doubt that a
lot
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 of students prefer to study in the same city with their
family
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families
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. Eventually, I will do
comparison
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 between the advantages and disadvantages
about
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of
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 living away from
home
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 during university and I will draw my own conclusion. As for the advantages, a
lot
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 of students believe it is positive because they will be more independent, and have their
home
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 and specific routine.
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, they can have a
lot
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 of friends in the same university. In terms
the
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 disadvantages, living away from
home
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 is difficult because you must
to
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have
own
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your own
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home
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 and it will consume more money.
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, it is hard for the emotional students living far from
own
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their own
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home
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homes
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 because they need to hear and listen
some
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to some
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word
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words
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 from
they
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their
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 parents upward they felling and have more
exatied
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excited
 to study.
Morefuther
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Furthermore
, it is hard to attend
in
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all family
gathering
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such
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 as
,
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dinner
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a dinner
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party
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parties
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 or
in
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morning breakfast. In conclusion, since there are a
lot
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 of
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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 In my opinion I think living away from
home
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have
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 a difficult
ways
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way
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 to do it.
However
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 the
student
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students
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change
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 from one to one around my family no one
can
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could
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to
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study or
living
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live
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 in
anther
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another
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 city.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that your introduction clearly outlines the main points you will discuss in the essay. This helps to set clear expectations.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your points. For example, discuss a situation where living away helped you become more independent.
task achievement
Improve sentence structure and grammar. Consider saying: 'Living away from home can be challenging as it often involves higher costs.'
task achievement
You have made a clear attempt to compare the advantages and disadvantages of living away from home during university.
coherence cohesion
Your essay includes both an introduction and a conclusion, showing a good understanding of essay structure.
task achievement
You have addressed both the emotional and practical aspects of living away from home, making your essay comprehensive.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • independence
  • self-reliance
  • finance management
  • exposure
  • broaden horizons
  • open-minded
  • adaptability
  • conducive environment
  • isolation
  • homesickness
  • financial burden
  • household duties
  • academic responsibilities
  • personal growth
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