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The diagrams show the structure of solar panel and its use. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams show the structure of solar panel and its use. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram, which depicts great detail, illustrates the composition of solar panels and the usage of them.
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, it can be observed that the solar panel can be utilised to heat up
both
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water
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 and
air
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 by their respective processes.
To begin
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 with, a solar panel consists of two main components, which are a box, approximately square shape, and a transparent top to seal the opened structure. It has an inlet and outlet on the sides of the box to assist any process occurring in it. The possible function of solar panels is to increase the temperatures of
air
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 and
water
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.
Both
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 undergo a homogeneous process, but the only stark difference is that
water
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 requires a
water
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 pipe to facilitate the procedure. Turning to the process, it needs energy from the sun in order to catalyse the heating up, with the aid of the transparent top to prevent excessive rays. The first step involves the flow of cool
air
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 or
water
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 into the box through the inlet attached.
Air
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 molecules will just circulate through the empty space, meanwhile,
water
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 will be directed by the pipe
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 they experience temperature escalation.
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,
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 warmed elements will stream out from the outlet and
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 marks the end of
both
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 processes

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words both, water, air with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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