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details of politician private lives should not be published in newspapers. to what extent do you agree or disagree ?

#politician #lives #newspapers
Publishing information regarding private matters of politicians in the media platforms
such
 as newspapers, and
newschannels
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news channels
 depends on the severity of the
news
.
However
, I believe personal
news
 of politicians being published
on
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in
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 the newspapers is
breach
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a breach
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 of
privacy
.
Articles
 being printed
on
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in
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 the newspapers about
personal
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the personal
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 whereabouts of the political
leader
provides
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provide
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 clarity to
common
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the common
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 man about the character of a
leader
.
News
articles
contains
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 details about the lavish lifestyle of a
leader
, and how
hard earned
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 tax money is utilised on distinct personal investments
as well as
 misusing their power.
For instance
,
articles
 on the properties
accquired
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acquired
 by political leaders with public funds for their personal benefit can open the eyes of
general
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the general
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 public
about
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to
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 the
intensions
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intentions
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 of their
leader
.
conversly
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Conversely
, I believe
article
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articles
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 regarding personal matters should not be printed
due to
breach
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breaches
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 of
privacy
along with
authenticity
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the authenticity
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 of
news
 resources. The primary reason for supporting
this
view point
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viewpoint
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 is
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the nreach
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nreach
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breach
 of
privacy
. As per the
canadian
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Canadian
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 law
privacy
 is
utmost
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the utmost
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 of the government, and before being a politician an individual is
also
 a citizen of
canada
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Canada
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;
therefore
, personal information being printed on the newspaper is considered
as
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a
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direct
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a direct
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 attack to
the
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canadian
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Canadian
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 law, and on the individual as well.
Furthermore
,
authenticity
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the authenticity
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 of the article published
on
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 the newspaper is a matter of concern. Most of the time the headline of
article
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the article
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 itself contains
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a quentionmark
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quentionmark
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question mark
 which simply
menas
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means
lack
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a lack
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 of rigid resources
of
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for
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 the
news
.
As a consequence
, the goodwill and image of the political
leader
acn
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can
 be easily manipulated by the publisher. In conclusion,
articles
 about the personal matters of a political
leader
ca
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can
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 provide an overview of an individual.
However
, lack of
news
 authenticity
,
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 and breach of
privacy
 is
matter
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a matter
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 of concern.
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Grammar
Ensure all personal pronouns and proper nouns are capitalized consistently (e.g., "Canadian," "Canada").
Task Achievement
Provide more specific and varied examples to strengthen the main points.
Grammar
Improve on grammatical accuracy, particularly with articles and verb forms (e.g., "contains" should be "contain").
Coherence and Cohesion
Consider breaking long sentences into shorter ones to improve readability.
Grammar
Work on reducing minor spelling errors (e.g., "acn" should be "can").
Introduction and Conclusion
The essay has an appropriate introduction and conclusion supporting the main argument.
Idea Presentation
The ideas are clear and presented logically, making it easy to follow the author's point of view.
Argument Support
Arguments are coherent and supported with relevant points related to the misuse of public funds.
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