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The bar chart below shows the hours per week that teenagers spend doing certain activities in Chester from 2002 to 2007.

The bar chart below shows the hours per week that teenagers spend doing certain activities in Chester from 2002 to 2007.
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The bar chart illustrates the
hours
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 of a teenager's weekly spending on certain activities.
Overall
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, teenagers spend the most of their
time
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 watching television.
In addition
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, bowling is the least-done activity among teens. The
time
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 spent watching DVDs and bowling
flactuated
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fluctuated
 for 5 years. The highest number watching DVDs reached was more than 15
hours
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, and the lowest was 10
hours
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 in a total of 7 days.
According to
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 the bar chart,
time
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 spent watching television reached more than 35
hours
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 in 2006 and 2007.
Besides
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 that, there is not a single year that bowling past more than 5
hours
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 per week.
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, the only
time
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 that going to pubs/discos activity
time
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 went below 10
hours
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 in a week was in 2002.
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, both doing homework and doing sports felt the same. Unlike doing homework and doing sports, shopping rose straight until 2006, in 2006 and 2007, shopping stayed the same at 15
hours
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 a week.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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