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In many countries nowadays, consumer can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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Nowadays
supermarket
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 is the most important stage where all the
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consumer
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consumers
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 go to buy the
product
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whereas
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seller
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sellers
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 showcase
there
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their
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 products for
sell
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sale
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. All over the
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world
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world,
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 the
supermarket
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 become the
place
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 where
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consumer
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consumers
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 can go to buy all the
food
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 produced in the
world
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.
However
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,
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although
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in today's
world
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supermarket
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supermarkets
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is
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are
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 very important
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place
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places
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 for
the
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apply
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consumer
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consumers
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 because they can find all the goods
at
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in
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 one
place
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. So it can create a positive impact in the surrounding
world
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. More things related to positive
devlopment
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development
developments
 are
disscused
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discussed
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ensuing
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the ensuing
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 paragraph. To commence with the
supermarket
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 has become
most
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the most
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 essential
place
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 for all the
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consumer
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consumers
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 to get
there
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their
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 daily
food
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 items for all different brands where they can compare the
price
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prices
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 and select the proper item which they want by staying
in
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within
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there
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their
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 budget. Supermarkets
also
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 provide
the
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a
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 wide range of
food
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product
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products
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 from the different
cusine
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countries
 of the
world
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 which
help
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helps
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the
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apply
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people to try and make
the
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apply
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various
variety
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varieties
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 of
food
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.
Moreover
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,
this
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supermarket
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 runs the discount or
voucher
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vouchers
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 and offers for
there
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their
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 loyal users. Where they
also
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 provide price
drop
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drops
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 on
the
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apply
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various
product
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 which
help
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helps
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 the
consumer
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 to try different
food
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product
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products
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and
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apply
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they
also
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 bring some
exculsive
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exclusive
food
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 items in store which
has
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different
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a different
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flavour
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flavours
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 and can only be available in their store.
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, big gaints like Woolworth and Coles
had
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have
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 provided
there
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their
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consumer
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consumers
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 with loyal
card
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cards
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 which they scan
everytime
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every time
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 when they go
for
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apply
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shopping and at some point
of
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in
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 time when they have collected the rewards points
then
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 they will get
discount
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a discount
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 on
there
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their
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 total bill.
Furthermore
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,
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supermarket
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the supermarket
a supermarket
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 is a
place
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 which
bring
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brings
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 all the
food
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product
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products
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 for all the
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consumer
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consumers
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 from
the
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apply
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different suppliers from
the
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apply
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different
part
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parts
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 of the
world
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 which
make
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makes
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 them unique and
create
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creates
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monopoly
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a monopoly
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 for them in the market.
Moreover
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,
government
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the government
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also
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 fund
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this
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these supermarkets
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supermarket
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gaints
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giants
 to
built
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be built
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there
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their
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supermarket
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a supermarket
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 near
to
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apply
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the
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apply
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different residential places which
help
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helps
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the
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apply
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local individuals to get
there
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their
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 daily
food
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item
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items
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 more conveniently. But, if the
compaines
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companies
 start growing like
this
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 it can create
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apply
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pressure on the
consumer
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 by charging more profit from the users and which can
craete
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create
the
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a
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 negative impact and can raise the debt for
there
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their
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consumer
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consumers
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 as they will end up
by
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apply
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spending more.
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, recently
the
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apply
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Woolworth which is
big
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a big
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supermarket
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 chain in Australia has
face
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faced
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 the consequences
from
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of
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 the
gorvenment
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government
 as it was seen that the gaint was charging more from the customer and created
one
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a one
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 billion dollar profit. In conclusion, supermarkets are
best
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the best
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place
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 for the
conveinence
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convenience
 of the
consumer
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 where they can find all the
food
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product
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products
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 from the different
part
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parts
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 of the
world
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. But,
government
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the government
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 should create some
boundries
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boundaries
 for
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this
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these
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supermarket
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 chains so that they cannot play with the consumers.

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task achievement
Your essay addresses the task and provides a complete response, but there are areas for improvement. Ensure you maintain clear and comprehensive ideas throughout your essay. Some points were not entirely clear due to grammatical issues and sentence structure.
coherence cohesion
The logical structure of your essay can be improved. Some paragraphs appear disjointed and don't seamlessly connect to one another. Consider using smooth transitions and ensuring each paragraph flows logically from one to the next.
coherence cohesion
To enhance coherence, ensure that each main point is clearly articulated and supported with sufficient examples. This will make your essay more convincing and easier to follow.
introduction conclusion present
Your introduction sets the stage for discussing both the positive and negative aspects of supermarkets and gives the reader a clear overview of the essay's content.
relevant specific examples
You included relevant and specific examples to support your main points, which helps illustrate your arguments clearly.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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