Task1: The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.

Task1: The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.
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The line chart illustrates the
consumption
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patterns of four different types of
meat
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and fish in a European country from 1979 to 2004.
Overall
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, the intake of chicken consistently increased throughout the 25 years, ultimately becoming the most popular
meat
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by 1989.
In contrast
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, fish remained the least popular choice throughout the
period
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, whose
consumption
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was around 50
grams
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weekly intake per capita over the whole
period
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. In 1979, beef was the most consumed
meat
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in the country, with an average of 220
grams
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per person per week. Meanwhile, every person only bought approximately 145g of chicken per week in the year, which was even lower than lamb. But
the
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chicken
consumption
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overtook that of lamb and beef, becoming the primary
consumption
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meat
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in 1989, and has stayed the main position in the market, which reached 250g weekly intake per capita in 2004. The usage of beef experienced a surge in the first five years from 1979, reaching a peak of 259
grams
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per person per week.
However
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, it continuously fell to only 110g over the rest of the
period
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.
However
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, both lamb and fish
consumption
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followed a descending trend over the whole
period
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, which fell to 60 and 50
grams
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respectively in 2004.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, meat, period, grams with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • fish
  • meat
  • poultry
  • beef
  • lamb
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • gradual
  • significant
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • trough
  • steady
  • correlation
  • period
  • data
  • comparison
  • predominant
  • kilograms per capita
  • dietary habits
  • health consciousness
  • sustainability
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