Some people think that young people should follow older people’s examples while others think it is good for young people to challenge older people’s opinions and thoughts. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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individuals
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to learn from older people's Add an article
a lot
experiance
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experience
experiences
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whereas
where as
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whereas
other
believe that young Fix the agreement mistake
others
adults
should challenge aged adults
opinions and ideas. Change noun form
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adult's
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my Capitalize word
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opinion
opition
, its mutual understanding between ages, one should accept and argue based on the fact not on beliefs
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opinion
one
hand, Aged Correct article usage
the one
individuals
are more experianced
and have Correct your spelling
experienced
overall
understanding of situations and things better than Add an article
an overall
youth
. furthermore
, this
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these
individuals
crossed different ages and played several roles and responsibilities as child
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children
teen
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teens
adult
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adults
spouse
,parents and citizens of Fix the agreement mistake
spouses
nation
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the nation
has
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have
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rulings
till
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Additionally
, these individuals
have seen wars, pandemics
, and Correct word choice
and pandemics
experianced
major discoveries. Correct your spelling
experienced
for
instance, Great aged person like Capitalize word
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abdul
kalam who was president of Change the capitalization
Abdul
india
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India
great
understanding of science and technology Add an article
a great
additionally
understands children and Correct word choice
and additionally
youth
at their level.
On the other hand
, Few older individual
believe in superstition and trust Fix the agreement mistake
individuals
doing
things that have no scientific evidence, young Change preposition
in doing
adults
should challenge and educate this
aged Correct determiner usage
these
individual
about science and technology and its advancements with facts and proofs. for Fix the agreement mistake
individuals
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instance
individuals
believe in applying black
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a black
the black
this
process enhances vision
of Add an article
the vision
baby
. Correct article usage
the baby
however
, todays
young doctors challenged and proved that Correct your spelling
today
this
process will cause harm to babies
eyes.
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babies'
baby's
individuals
are more knowledged and has
wide Change the verb form
have
experiance
than young Correct your spelling
experience
adults
. however
, youth
should question and challenge aged individuals
if their
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