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The diagram below shows the recycling process of wasted glass bottles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. write at least 150 words

The diagram below shows the recycling process of wasted glass bottles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. write at least 150 words
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The flow charts illustrate the steps of recycling
glass
bottles
.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 we can see there are three stages and 12 steps in total. Starting from collecting old
glass
bottles
,
then
 manufacturing them and delivering the new
bottle
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bottles
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 to supermarkets.
At
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In
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 the first stage
in
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of
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 the waste process of
bottles
, there are 3 steps.
Firstly
, the used
glass
bottles
 are disposed
to
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of at
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 the collection point
then
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and then
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 transported by lorries. Turning to the second stage, the
bottles
 are
being
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apply
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cleaned with high-pressure water,
then
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and then
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 differentiated by colour, specifically clear, green and brown. After that, these
glass
bottles
 will break into
glass
 pieces by
glass
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the glass
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 factory and
burned
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be burned
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by
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in
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furnace
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a furnace
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 between 600 to 800 Celsius.
Next,
the recycled
glass
 will become liquid
glass
 which
mixed
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is mixed
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 with new liquid
glass
,
then
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and then
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 shaped in
glass
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a glass
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 mould.
At
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In
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 the final stage, the new
bottled
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bottles
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 will be created and
will fill
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filled
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 with different drinks,
then
 the new drinks can
finally
 be ready
to
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for
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 sale in supermarkets.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words glass, bottles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Recycling process
  • Glass bottles
  • Collected
  • Sorting
  • Colour
  • Washing
  • Impurities
  • Residues
  • Crushing
  • Cullets
  • Melting
  • Furnace
  • Molten glass
  • Molding
  • Shaping and forming processes
  • Cooling and solidifying
  • Inspection
  • Distribution
  • Retailers
  • Manufacturers
  • Reuse
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