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The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given diagram illustrates a hydroelectric
power
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station
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 and how electricity is generated in it. A hydroelectric
power
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station
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 uses
water
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 energy to generate electricity from a high level to a low level. It works in different modes
day
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 and
night
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. During the
day
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, the
water
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 flow passes under the dam in the high-level reservoir, which is only open during the
day
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.
Water
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 flowing into the
power
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station
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 operates a generator with a reversible turbine.
Then
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 it crosses the
power
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 lines and goes to the national grid.
On the other hand
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, a
night
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station
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 starts from where it ends, unlike a
day
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station
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.
First,
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the low-level
water
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 holder pumps
water
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 to the high-level
water
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 tank. During pumping, the
water
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 flow is closed at
night
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 after reaching the high-level
water
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 basin in the upstream direction.
To conclude
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, hydroelectric
power
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 stations work by performing different functions
according to
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 different parts of the
day
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. In the daytime, it uses natural
water
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 energy. Meanwhile, at
night
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, it transfers the
water
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 to create and store the energy for the next
day
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words power, station, water, day, night with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • hydroelectric power station
  • reservoir
  • turbine
  • generate electricity
  • transmit
  • low-level reservoir
  • high-level reservoir
  • dam
  • cycle of electricity production
  • energy storage
  • flowing water
  • sustainability
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