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the bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014

the bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014
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the bar chart illustrates the amount of electricity usage and production in
top
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 ten countries of the world in 2014. It is clearly seen that
the
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China and the
united states
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United States
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 stand first and second place for both
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,respectively and
also
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 to 9 of these ten countries which
was
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produced more than was consumed,
germany
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Germany
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 consumed electricity 55.9 billion
kwh
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kWh
 more than they produced. as can be seen, china and the
U.S
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U.S.
 produced 76 and 233 (billion kwa) more than their usage. electricity was produced in
russia
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Russia
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 and
korea
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Korea
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 just 19 and 35.6 billion kwa less than it was produced. japan,
india
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India
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,
canada
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Canada
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,
france
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France
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 and
brazil
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Brazil
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 ranked from third to 8th, respectively.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • megawatt-hours (MWh)
  • electricity grid
  • renewable energy sources
  • fossil fuels
  • energy efficiency
  • consumption patterns
  • power generation
  • industrial demand
  • residential use
  • transmission losses
  • energy imports
  • sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • energy policy
  • capacity
  • infrastructure
  • demand and supply
  • electrification
  • energy security
  • grid reliability
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