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The bar chart below shows the number of people who visited different museums in London during different months in 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart below shows the number of people who visited different museums in London during different months in 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The provided bar chart enumerates the number of people who visited famous
museums
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 in London in different months in 2015. All things considered; it is evident that a vast of
visitors
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 were at the British Museum
whereas
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 the national museum was approximately the same throughout the year. British
museums
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 occupied the highest figures among all
museums
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 with 700.000
visitors
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 respectively Compared with the other
museums
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 , especially in August. Controversial with national
museums
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 which had the lowest number of
visitors
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 and roughly under 200.000. history
museums
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 fluctuated whole the year and reached 600.000 in August
while
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 the number of
visitors
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 declined at the beginning of December.
Finally
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,
it is clear that
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 the science
museums
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 were over 400.000 by June and
then
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 continued to decrease
then
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 suddenly increased to 500.000
at the end
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 of September,
then
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 it surged down to the lowest figure of
visitors
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 in December.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words museums, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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