Well, mentioning to this topic, the first thing springs to my mind is our trip going to Vung Tau. My friend and I planned for this trip 1 week before, and
Well, mentioning
to
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apply
this
topic, the first thing springs
to my mind is our trip Correct pronoun usage
that springs
going
to Vung Tau. My friend and I planned for Verb problem
apply
this
trip 1 week before, and we were really excited that we couldn’t sleep in
the previous night. That’s why my team set off really soon, at 4 A.M. when we started, the weather was mild, with Change preposition
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small
wind and the Sun just Correct word choice
little
came
out. Wrong verb form
come
However
, after 2 hours, the sky became darker and darker, with strong winds and black clouds. At first,
we thought it was OK to continue, but the situation was worser
because of the Correct your spelling
worse
rain
cats and dogs. We had to go to the stop to wait until the rain
let up. After 1 hour, the rain
was still heavy and I was really exhausted and hangry
that we didn’t have anything to eat. Correct your spelling
hungry
Although
the rain
still heavy, we still decided to go to Vung Tau. we were Add a verb
rain is
rain was
tired
that couldn’t go anywhere and had to sleep in Rephrase
so tired
hotel
to recharge Add an article
the hotel
a hotel
the
batteries. Change the word
our
Finally
, we still had a great trip, although
it made me exhausted. However
, this
bad weather condition left me a
great memory.Change preposition
with a
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