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Band 4.5

Workers are more satisfied when they have many different types of tasks to do during the workday than when they do similar tasks all day long. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Nowadays, most
workers
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 are more convinced when they
work
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in
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on
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 different
tasks
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 during the
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work day
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workday
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,
while
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 others think that
workers
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 should have similar
tasks
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 to
work
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 on or only
one
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 task.
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, in
this
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artical
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article
, both points of view are discussed.
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, some
workers
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 prefer to have similar
tasks
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 or
one
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 only to do during
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work
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 time because they don't like to learn many things and
work
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 in several ways.
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, the
person
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like
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likes
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 to repeat what he learn from the
begging
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beginning
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 every day because he feels comfortable when they have only
one
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 or similar
tasks
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 to do.
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, these
workers
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 think that when they
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in
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one
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 task or similar
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that
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apply
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they will
work
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 better than when they
work
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in
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 several
tasks
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.
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, school teachers like to
work
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 either in school only or in school
and
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as private teachers.
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, nowadays, companies need employees with many skills and qualifications to
work
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in
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 several
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. To explain, teenagers need to know about different
tasks
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 to improve their
knowledage
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knowledge
 and skills to get professional jobs in the future with several
tasks
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, high
salary
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salaries
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, and
stronge
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strong
stronger
position
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positions
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.
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,
economical
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 companies employ the
person
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 who will
work
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 as a lawyer and
accountant
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accountants
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, which will help the
person
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 to obtain
high
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a high
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 salary and
good
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a good
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 position.
To sum up
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,
although
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focasing
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focusing
in
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one
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 task or similar
tasks
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 is more convenient, I strongly believe that the
person
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need
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needs
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 to
work
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in
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 several
tasks
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 to get
better
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a better
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 salary and position in the future.

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coherence cohesion
Work on improving sentence structure to eliminate grammatical mistakes and enhance the clarity of your points.
task achievement
Ensure that each argument is well-supported with relevant examples and explanations.
task achievement
Provide a clearer thesis statement in the introduction that directly addresses the essay question.
task achievement
You have effectively presented two different points of view.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and a concluding paragraph.
coherence cohesion
The arguments are logically ordered, and the flow of the essay is easy to follow.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Job satisfaction
  • Engagement
  • Varied
  • Monotony
  • Skill set
  • Boredom
  • Professional development
  • Multifaceted
  • Creativity
  • Innovation
  • Adaptability
  • Problem-solving
  • Work-life balance
  • Monotonous
  • Flexible work
  • Specialization
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