The table given below provides information about the projected costings over the next 5 years in American dollars for three environmental projects for sustainable forestry. The pie chart illustrates the expected expenditure breakdown allocation for the first year as the projects are set up.

The table given below provides information about the projected costings over the next 5 years in American dollars for three environmental projects for sustainable forestry. The pie chart illustrates the expected expenditure breakdown allocation for the first year as the projects are set up.
The provided data illustrates the expected cost of three different
projects
, created to develop forestry
that is
environment friendly, over the next 5 years. The pie chart shows the possible
spendings
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during the
first
year
of the project.
Overall
, in
Year
1
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1,
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the biggest amount of money will be spent on
sallaries
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salaries
. There is a common pattern for years 3 to 5 for all
projects
, where the costs remain approximately the same during
this
time frame. For West Africa and Central America,
Year
1 will be the most expensive. A
decrese
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decrease
in expenses is visible for both, West Africa and Central America, over the
5
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5-year
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year
period with only a slight fluctuation
at the end
for the
first
mentioned.
However
, for the
South-east
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Southeast
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Asia
project
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project,
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the costs rise from 30 to 50 million,
while
experiencing a slight drop during the second
year
. If the expenses for
first
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the first
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two
projects
mentioned
would be
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combined, they would still remain
cheapewr
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cheaper
than the
South - east
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Southeast
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Asia
projects
, which
requires
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require
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about 190 million in total.
Year
1 seems to be quite expensive for the
first
two
projects
. Because the salaries take up exactly
a
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half of the expenses, it leaves the set-up costs at 30% and the training and office expenditures both at only 10%.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words projects, first, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable forestry
  • projected costings
  • expenditure breakdown
  • financial commitments
  • trends
  • stability
  • funding
  • allocation
  • biodiversity preservation
  • carbon sequestration
  • sustainable land use
  • environmental conservation
  • speculation
  • long-term benefits
  • continuous investment
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