What invention in the last 30 years has made the most difference in the lives of people? Explain why it has had such a noteworthy effect. Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.

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The invention of the

smart phone

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has changed the world as we see it. It has had

such

a noteworthy effect because it has both advantages and disadvantages to it. I believe, that as long as we maintain our screen time we have nothing to worry about. On one hand,

Phones

have revolutionized our way of communication because they provide a platform so that we can talk to anyone anywhere, they have

also

provided us a way to connect with

people

all over the world and learn about their culture.

Furthermore

phones

have made news more accessible to the general public and

hence

people

can address issues in large amounts and in a more convenient way

while

also

providing us with more functions like calculators and apps that can help with our expenses and more.

Phones

have

also

given us the opportunity to watch new movies and TV shows in our leisure time with apps like Netflix and Amazon Prime. From my experience, smartphones have changed society in the

last

30 years and will continue to do so with the rise in technology. They have

also

helped small businesses grow over time with social media and have become a huge part of a country's GDP.

On the other hand

, each advantage has its own disadvantage,

while

phones

have become an important part of our lives, they have

also

made us more lazy and less creative. Addiction

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phones

has

also

become very common and can cause

people

to not leave their homes and not get involved in any physical activity which can

further

cause physical and mental illnesses.

Moreover

Phones

have

also

given a platform for scammers and predators to scam the vulnerable like the elderly and children , like my uncle who got scammed recently over a marketing scheme.

Furthermore

, long exposures to smartphones have caused

people

to lose their eyesight over the years.

To conclude

, I believe that the advantages of using a smartphone outweigh the disadvantages provided that one takes precautions and maintains their screentimes.

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Try to include a few more specific examples to support your points. For instance, mention particular apps or features on smartphones that have revolutionized communication or business.

coherence cohesion

Ensure that your points are distinctly separated and your argument flows logically from one to the next. For instance, avoid repetitive phrases and maintain the clarity of your argument.

task achievement

The essay clearly addresses both advantages and disadvantages of smartphones, providing a balanced argument.

coherence cohesion

The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

338 words

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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