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The table below show the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below show the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The information regarding the
number
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 of visitors to Ashdown Museum during and after its refurbishment is depicted
by
Change preposition
in
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 the given table. The pie chart illustrates the satisfaction of travellers.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that the
number
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 of dissatisfaction had been decreased year after refurbishment.
However
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, the
number
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 of individuals who didn’t
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response
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respond
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 had levelled off during
the
Correct determiner usage
that
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 period of time. To commence with, It is evident from
data
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the data
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 that, the first category is dissatisfied. It can be seen that it had declined by 25%. The
another
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other
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 part that fell down was very satisfied, the
response
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 reached
at
Change preposition
apply
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15 which was at 10 before.
Moreover
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, the
non
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non-response
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response
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number
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 didn’t change its movement at all.
Furthermore
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,When it comes to satisfied visitors, the
number
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had
Wrong verb form
has
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inclined
Verb problem
increased
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 from 30 to 40. In the end, the
last
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 category very satisfied travellers showed
significant
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a significant
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 rise in the
response
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 which had been changed from 15 to 35.At the same time,
total
Change the article
a total
the total
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number
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 of travellers was higher during the year after refurbishment
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
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 stands at 92,000.The difference of 18,000 people had been seen in these years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, response with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • refurbishment
  • visitors
  • satisfaction surveys
  • trends
  • correlation
  • exhibits
  • facilities
  • service
  • overall experience
  • monthly distribution
  • peak season
  • off-season
  • visitor influx
  • satisfaction rate
  • enhancements
  • feedback
  • comparative analysis
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