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In spite of the advances made in the sphere of agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry payment and land. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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In today's
century
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 there are some
advnces
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advances
 made in agriculture. People have learned to grow more foodstuffs faster than ever. But despite the progress in agriculture, numerous people worldwide continue to experience hunger.
This
 essay will try to figure out why
this
 is the case and suggest possible solutions
of
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this
 problem. First of all, the main reason why some people are starving is
irrational
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the irrational
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 use of
food
. Just like with the money, when someone gets everything, others get nothing.
Due to
 uneven distribution, there are
who
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those who
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 overeat too.
For
instance
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 it is known that more than 36% population of the US are
being
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obese,
whereas
 most of the
Afticans
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Africans
 go hungry. A
signifficant
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significant
 portion of
food
 is wasted
due to
 inefficiencies in harvesting, storage, and consumption.
Adressing
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Addressing
 global hunger requires a multifaceted approach that
adresses
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addresses
 its root causes,
such
 as poverty. By introducing solutions
such
 as reducing
food
 waste, improving infrastructure,
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and
 promoting sustainable farming practices, we can move towards a world where everyone has access to sufficient
food
. Of
course
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 it
is
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can not be done without collaborative efforts by
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government
goverment
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government
 and philanthropic organisations
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