The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph displays how the average prices of
three
metals
(copper,
nickel
, and zinc) changed
in
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every month in 2014.
Overall
, these
three
metals
experience
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experienced
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the
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apply
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similiar
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similar
changes in 2014. And the
price
of the
nickel
experienced
the
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a
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significant
flucturation
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fluctuation
fluctuations
during
this
period. In January,
the
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apply
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nickel
was the largest
change
in these
three
metals
, at 6% compared with its
price
last
month,
while
the
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copper
at
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was at
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2% and
the
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zinc at 1% respectively.
However
, the
change
on
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in
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nickel
's
price
drop
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dropped
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rapidly to 1% in March,
then
, it
remained
Verb problem
maintained
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this
change
in April until it declined again, at -3% in June. Before
December
, the
nickel
price
change
ecperienced
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experienced
a slight increase but never
recoverd
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recovered
at its previous level, just
remained
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remaining
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at 1% in
December
.
In contrast
, in January, the
change
in
price
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the price
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of copper was lower than
the
Correct determiner usage
that
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nickel
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of nickel
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.
Similiarly
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Similar
to
nickel
, it decreased
steadly
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steadily
until June, and the next month,
this
trend changed to
be
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an increase, at 1%. In
December
,
this
trend remained
its
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at its
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previous level, at nearly 1.5%.
However
,
although
the
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apply
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zinc was the smallest
change
in
price
in January, it became the highest of these
three
metals
in
December
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words three, metals, nickel, price, change, december with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 9 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.

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  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
  • marginal
  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
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