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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph displays how the average prices of
three
metals
 (copper,
nickel
, and zinc) changed
in
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apply
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every month in 2014.
Overall
, these
three
metals
experience
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experienced
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the
Correct article usage
apply
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similiar
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similar
 changes in 2014. And the
price
 of the
nickel
 experienced
the
Correct article usage
a
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 significant
flucturation
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fluctuation
fluctuations
 during
this
 period. In January,
the
Correct article usage
apply
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nickel
 was the largest
change
 in these
three
metals
, at 6% compared with its
price
last
 month,
while
the
Correct article usage
apply
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copper
at
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was at
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 2% and
the
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apply
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zinc at 1% respectively.
However
, the
change
on
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in
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nickel
's
price
drop
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dropped
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 rapidly to 1% in March,
then
, it
remained
Verb problem
maintained
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this
change
 in April until it declined again, at -3% in June. Before
December
, the
nickel
price
change
ecperienced
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experienced
 a slight increase but never
recoverd
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recovered
 at its previous level, just
remained
Wrong verb form
remaining
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 at 1% in
December
.
In contrast
, in January, the
change
 in
price
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the price
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 of copper was lower than
the
Correct determiner usage
that
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nickel
Change preposition
of nickel
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.
Similiarly
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Similar
 to
nickel
, it decreased
steadly
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steadily
 until June, and the next month,
this
 trend changed to
be
Unnecessary verb
apply
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an increase, at 1%. In
December
,
this
 trend remained
its
Change preposition
at its
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 previous level, at nearly 1.5%.
However
,
although
the
Correct article usage
apply
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zinc was the smallest
change
 in
price
 in January, it became the highest of these
three
metals
 in
December
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words three, metals, nickel, price, change, december with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 9 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
  • marginal
  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
  • soar
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