Some say that now we can see films on our phones and tablets there is no need to go to the cinema other says to be fully enjoyed films need to be seen in a cinema. What is your opinion?
In
this
technological era, some individuals are in favour or
watching Correct your spelling
of
movies
using electronic devices
at
their homes Change preposition
in
while
other
opine that they should go to theatres. Fix the agreement mistake
others
However
, both have their own merits and demerits but I believe that cinema houses are better. In the upcoming pragraphs
, I will elaborate Correct your spelling
paragraphs
further
.
To commence with, Cinema houses have devices
which are expensive and people can not afford those. These devices
gives
different Change the verb form
give
level
of enjoyment Fix the agreement mistake
levels
while
watching movies
, especially action films. The sound coming from speakers attract
Correct subject-verb agreement
attracts
attention
of viewers and Add an article
the attention
maintain
a level of attraction which is really hard at home. Correct subject-verb agreement
maintains
Moreover
, the resolution of screens does not effect
the eyes as mobile can do because of its size and distance from viewers. Correct your spelling
affect
For example
, from a study
it is seen that users of mobiles are facing issues of weak eyesight rather than watching big screen.
Add a comma
study,
Additionally
, everyone is in the rat race to build good
lifestyle. If they go to theatres to watch a film they can stay away from professional and personal matters for some time. They can enjoy their own time which is hard at Add an article
a good
homes
. Fix the agreement mistake
home
For instance
, from a poll
it is found that Add a comma
poll,
higher
percentage of Correct article usage
a higher
nation
choose to go outside to enjoy Correct article usage
the nation
movies
instead
of watching on devices
.
In conclusion, in this
advance
world, whether to stay at Replace the word
advanced
house
or to visit Add an article
the house
to
cinema places for films is debatable among Remove the preposition
apply
number
of people. But I firmly agree that people should watch Change the article
a number
the number
movies
in halls to enjoy the image, noise
and to experience me time.Correct word choice
and noise
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