Some people say that in our modern age, because of advancement in digital technology, it is no longer necessary for people to learn handwriting skills. But others believe handwriting is still an important skill. Discuss these views and state your opinion.

Nowadays leading technological achievements have
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many debates about handwriting. Some believe that
due to
the technological tools, it is not imperative to learn how to write.
On the other hand
, others think that the necessity of learning
this
skill is undeniable. I heartfully believe that
this
ability must be learned, and the reasons, for both views, will be discussed below. On the one hand, sometimes technology can be tempting through
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that provides. One of the methods that has been offered is about handwriting. In a closer perspective, new achievements in applications and cell phones, afford facilities to remove the compulsion for writing. So, it can be observed that individuals do not tend to bear the sufferance of writing.
For instance
, recently, CHAT GPT​ has provided a new update which is related to the detection of speaking
instead
of typing.
On the other hand
, there is a notion that
believes
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in spite of technological life, some skills’ achievement, like writing,
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necessary. Based on
this
view, people especially children, can enhance their brains’ cognitive skills, and in turn, they could be more smart and more talented.
For example
,
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children who have better writing ability, in the future, they will have better function in their
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and
relationship
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. In a nutshell, technology has founded two different
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of view about writing. Some believe that acquiring writing ability is not imperative;
However
, others think that learning
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this
skill is a fundamental base for better cognitive skills.
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task achievement
You have addressed both views of the topic and provided a clear opinion. However, your essay could benefit from more relevant and specific examples to support your points. Try to include real-life examples, studies, or statistics where possible.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a logical structure and clear paragraphs, but sometimes the ideas are not fully developed. For instance, you mentioned cognitive skills improvement for children without much elaboration or specific evidence. Expanding on these points would make your argument stronger.
coherence cohesion
There were a few inaccuracies and awkward phrases, such as 'bear the sufferance of writing' and 'technology has founded two different point of view'. Polishing these phrases to make them more standard would improve readability.
coherence cohesion
There is a good introduction and conclusion, but try to make the transition between ideas smoother. Linking sentences, phrases like 'Furthermore', 'In addition', or 'Therefore' can help improve the flow.
task achievement
You have presented a balanced view of the topic by discussing both sides of the argument and also stating your opinion clearly.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are clear and provide a good overview of the essay's main points.

Word Count

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obsolete
  • communication
  • digital devices
  • smartphones
  • tablets
  • decrease
  • traditional handwriting skills
  • cognitive development
  • fine motor skills
  • memory retention
  • brain function
  • personal identity
  • cultural history
  • handwritten notes
  • digital communication
  • productivity
  • workplaces
  • touch typing
  • electronic health records
  • legible handwriting
  • educational benefits
  • psychological benefits
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