The graph below shows the percentage of the Australian workforce in five industries between 1962 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart compares the proportion of workers in Services, manufacturing,
agriculture
, construction and mining in Australian
from 1962 to 2012.
Correct your spelling
Australia
Overall
, the percentage
of workers in services
sector saw an upward trend, Correct article usage
the services
while
the others decreased significantly. Only the percentage
of workers in mining factor remain
the same at all time Change the verb form
remains
period
.
In 1962, employees in the service sector accounted for just over 50%, and Fix the agreement mistake
periods
this
figure steadily increased about
30% after 50 years. The Change preposition
by about
percentage
of services reached the highest point in 2012 at almost 80%.
Meanwhile, at the same time, the percentage
of manufacturing and agriculture
fallen down
by 10% after 50 years. To be more specific, in 1962, manufacturing and Wrong verb form
fell
agriculture
were 25% and 11%, in the year 2012s, both of them decreased to only 10% in manufacturing and above 0% in agriculture
which even
lower than Add a missing verb
is even
the
construction. Correct article usage
apply
Lastly
, the percentage
of mining stayed almost the same at all years. In 1962, mining started at 0% Change preposition
of worker
worker
and in 2012 was 1%, Fix the agreement mistake
workers
remained
the most unpopular Wrong verb form
remaining
industries
at that time.Fix the agreement mistake
industry
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Vocabulary: Replace the words agriculture, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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