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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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This
 graph illustrates the
number
 of
household
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households
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 in the US
shows
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shown
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 by their annual salary.
This
 chart
divided
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is divided
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 into several groupings based on their annual salaries. Both groups who received $50,000-$74,999 and $75,000 – $99,999 have stagnant numbers of
household
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households
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 throughout 2007-2015 amounting to 20
millions
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 and 14
millions
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 respectively.
In
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other
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the other
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 side, different
pattern
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patterns
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 faced the
income
 group of less than $25,000 and $25,000-$49,000
who
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 faced
fluctuate
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 but mostly stable patterns starting from 25
millions
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 and 26
millions
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million
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 in 2007 to 27
millions
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million
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 and 28
millions
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million
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 in 2015. Meanwhile,
household
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households
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 who was in the highest group
facing
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faced
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 fluctuation throughout the years. It started
by
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with
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 29
millions
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million
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of
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household
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households
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 and rose to 34
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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household
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households
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 by the end of 2015.
While in
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In
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 2007, the
least
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lowest
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number
 of
household
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households
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 was
household
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households
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 with
the
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an
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income
 of $75,000-99,999,
while
 the highest was with
the
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an
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income
 of $100,000.
Given the
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 fact that the highest
number
 of
household
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households
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 in 2011 was different,
which
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apply
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from the
household
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households
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 who had $25,000-$49,000.
Finally
, in 2015, the highest
number
 of
household
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households
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 was back with the group of
income
 of $100,000.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, household, millions, income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household distribution
  • income brackets
  • annual income
  • percentage change
  • trend analysis
  • income group
  • significant increase/decrease
  • steady growth/decline
  • fluctuations
  • compared to
  • in contrast
  • notably
  • median income
  • poverty line
  • economic factors
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