The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in england and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in england and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
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The bar chart illustrates
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percentage
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the percentage
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of people who own their own house and who
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rented
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in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
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,
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household
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households
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in owned
accommodation
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has
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increased given period and
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households
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in rented
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decreased from 1918 to 2011 and slightly
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increased in
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year, 2011. İnitially,
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a household
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household
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households
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in owned
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was just over 20%,
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however
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households in rented
occommodation
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accommodation
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was
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approximately
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fourfold
, almost 80%. In 1971,
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two subjects
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equal to each other, 50% per cent. From 1939 to 1961 and from 1981 to 2001
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the percentage
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percentage
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was
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really similar to each other. But in
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,
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the percentage
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of
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household
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households
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in owned
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and
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households
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in rented
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was
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were
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opposite each other.
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, in 1953,
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household
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the household
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in owned
accommodation
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percentage
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was just over 30% and in 1991,
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household
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in rented
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was just over 30%.
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, in 1939
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household
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in rented
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ratio
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70%, to opposite
this
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, in 2001
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the household
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in
owned
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ratio was just under 70%. In
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year,
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the household
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household
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households
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in owned
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percentage
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was twice as much
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household
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in rented
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, about 63%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, household, accommodation with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • tenancy
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • proportion
  • residence
  • dwelling
  • shift
  • transition
  • migration
  • fluctuate
  • stabilize
  • rise
  • fall
  • increase
  • decrease
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