The line chart below shows the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevant.

The line chart below shows the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the results of the survey that has been done in a particular country, it shows a comparison of different reasons that forced people to make the moving decision to the capital city over fifteen years.
Overall
, all data experienced an upward trend, The most significant increase observed in the study . Adventure is proportionally low compared to other causes. The majority of people are moving for work. In 2000, the total number of individuals who left their town to be
an employees
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was 6,000.
This
number rapidly increased during a decade, to more than 9,000 in 2010, before
declined
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slightly to less than 9,000
at the end
of the period. Regarding adventure, it consistently accounted for less than 2,000.
On the other hand
, the initial figure for the study was approximately 2,500, the data shows a sharp
increased
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to around 5,000 in 2005
,
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and continued to rise to roughly 5,400, reaching a peak at around 8,600 in 2005. In terms of family and friends data, it has remained almost stable
at
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the first five years,
then
it
growth
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to around 2000 in 2010, and stayed steady
to
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until
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the end of the period.
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