The bar chart below shows the number of people who visited different museums in London during different months in 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The presented bar chart illustrates the number of people who
they
visited four Correct pronoun usage
apply
various
museums in Correct word choice
apply
capital
city of England (London) during five different Add an article
the capital
month
( June, July, August, September, Change to a plural noun
months
December
) in 2015.
Correct word choice
and December
overall
, the number of people who visited the British museum
in August was more than the others(around 700.000). Capitalize word
Museum
while
the National museumhad
been visited less than the others (just below 200.000).
Correct your spelling
museum had
museum has
according to
the chart, the national museum
's visitors
were less than the other museums in all of 5 month
.Change to a plural noun
months
in contrast
, the visitors
of
the Change preposition
to
british
Change the capitalization
British
museum
where had been visited akmost
more than the others( except Correct your spelling
almost
than
in Change preposition
apply
june
Change the capitalization
June
which
the science Correct word choice
when
museum
's visitors
were almost 10.000 person
more than Change to a plural noun
people
national
Add an article
the national
museum
). the numbers of history museum's
Change noun form
museum
visitors
were around 400.000 and exaxtly
400.000 in Correct your spelling
exactly
june
and Change the capitalization
June
july
respectively, Change the capitalization
July
then
it rose to 600.000 in august
( ranked second between all museums and Capitalize word
August
month
) Fix the agreement mistake
months
then
it went down to almost 400.000 again and about 270.000 in september
and Change the capitalization
September
december
.Change the capitalization
December
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