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The bar chart below shows the number of people who visited different museums in London during different months in 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart below shows the number of people who visited different museums in London during different months in 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The presented bar chart illustrates the number of people who
they
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apply
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visited four
various
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apply
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museums in
capital
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the capital
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 city of England (London) during five different
month
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months
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( June, July, August, September,
December
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and December
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) in 2015.
overall
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, the number of people who visited the British
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museum
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Museum
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 in August was more than the others(around 700.000).
while
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 the National
museumhad
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museum had
museum has
 been visited less than the others (just below 200.000).
according to
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 the chart, the national
museum
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's
visitors
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 were less than the other museums in all of 5
month
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months
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 .
in contrast
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, the
visitors
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of
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to
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 the
british
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British
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museum
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 where had been visited
akmost
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almost
 more than the others( except
than
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apply
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in
june
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June
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which
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when
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 the science
museum
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's
visitors
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 were almost 10.000
person
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people
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 more than
national
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the national
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museum
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). the numbers of history
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museum's
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museum
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visitors
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 were around 400.000 and
exaxtly
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exactly
 400.000 in
june
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June
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 and
july
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July
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 respectively,
then
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 it rose to 600.000 in
august
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August
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 ( ranked second between all museums and
month
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months
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)
then
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 it went down to almost 400.000 again and about 270.000 in
september
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September
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 and
december
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December
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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