The diagram below shows how a biofuel called ethanol is produced.

The diagram below shows how a biofuel called ethanol is produced.
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The diagram illustrates several stages in the production of biofuel, which is ethanol.
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, it seems that the industrial production of ethanol requires a lot of effort and steps. And
this
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picture shows a carbon cycle.
First,
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trees and plants absorb carbon dioxide emitted by various factories and vehicles,
subsequently
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, the harvest is gathered and undergoes a preliminary processing phase, where it becomes cellulose. Afterwards, it is transferred to the chemical laboratory, in which it is converted into sugar. After that, it will broken down by bacteria. And
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finally
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it turns into ethanol.
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,
this
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substance works like fuel for
transports
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, And with the use of
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, cars can operate
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emitting CO2,   which will be absorbed by trees and plants.
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is how the carbon cycle is established.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biomass
  • ethanol
  • fermentation
  • microorganisms
  • yeast
  • carbon dioxide
  • distillation
  • purification
  • dehydration
  • raw materials
  • storage
  • distribution
  • renewable energy
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • sustainable fuel
  • concentration
  • impurities
  • alcohol content
  • crop growth
  • conversion process
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