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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library20 years ago and how it looks now.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library20 years ago and how it looks now.
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The two given maps depict the central library during 20 years, between the past and the present.
Overall
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, it is evident that eight new features are added to the latter
map
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, including a lecture
room
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,
adult
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fiction
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books
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, an information
desk
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, three self-service machines, one cafe, a computer
room
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, an
area
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 for reference
books
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 and a
part
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 for children's
books
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 In the former
map
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, there were two circular tables and 16 chairs in the middle of the floor and on the right side of the tables there was an
area
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 for
adult
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 non-
fiction
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books
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. On the south side of the
adult
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 non-
fiction
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books
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area
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, there was an enquiry
desk
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 which used to be for tickets, book returns etc. The only unchanged feature is the entrance. As can be seen in the second plan, a
part
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 of former
adult
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fiction
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books
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 is rebuilt to reduce its size.
Moreover
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, the rest of that
area
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 is used for a rectangular information
desk
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 and three self-service machines.
Also
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, the enquiry
desk
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 was demolished to make way for a new cafe in the southeast of the present
map
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. In the previous
map
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, there was a rectangular
room
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 for CDs, videos and computer games,
however
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 at present, they are converted into two shapeless sofas, an
area
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 for storytelling events
as well as
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 a
part
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 for children's
fiction
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books
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.
Besides
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, where a computer
room
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 stands which is situated in the southwest corner of the second plan, there used to be a reading
room
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 which contained both newspapers and magazines. The children's
books
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room
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 was
also
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 destroyed to make way for a new rectangular lecture
room
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. In front of the reading
room
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 in the former plan, there was an
area
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 for
adult
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fiction
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books
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 which now is converted into a
part
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 for all reference
books
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words map, room, adult, fiction, books, desk, area, part with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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