In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers prefer going to large shopping centers or malls to do their shopping. Is this a positive or negative development?

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at first sight , of course, it is not good to see people lose their jobs yet business is a competition and I think

customers

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happiness is the main factor . When you can shop

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your needs in one place ,

that is

obviously a good thing ,

this

can save you more time , less traffic and

pollution

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, small business owners have a life too , so there should be other ways to keep their occupation , in my view the internet and online shopping are a huge help to them , with a bit of professional marketing on social media and the internet they can own a large number of customers and keep selling and gain income.

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0Word repetition
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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

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Task Achievement: 5.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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local employment
community identity
competitive pricing
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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