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The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in sir cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in sir cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table provides information regarding the underground
railway
 networks in different cities across the world. Among the given cities, London
is
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has
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 the oldest underground
railway
 system. It was first opened
on
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in
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 1863 with a distance of 394 kilometres and 775
millions
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million
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passengers
 annually. The second oldest underground
railway
 system is
at
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in
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 Paris. Strecthed over 199
kilometeres
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kilometres
 and
moving
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moved
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 1191 million
passengers
annualy
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annually
, followed by Tokyo established in the
year
 1927 with 155 Kilometres.
Eventhough
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Even though
 Tokyo ranks third in terms of route length, with less than half of London's total distance, it transfers more travellers than any other
railway
systems
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system
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. Los Angeles is the most recently constructed underground
railway
 system. The network was opened in 2001 with 28 km in length and moving 50
millions
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million
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passengers
 every
year
. Kyoto
being
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is
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 the shortest
railway
 network
extend
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extends
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 to 11km and
transferring
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transfers
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 45 million
passengers
 every
year
. Washington DC started working in the
year
 1976, moving 144 million
passengers
annaully
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annually
 with a route length of 126 kilometres.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words railway, passengers, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • underground railway system
  • route length
  • annual passengers
  • opening date
  • established
  • network
  • passenger numbers
  • comparison
  • geographical location
  • urban transit
  • infrastructure
  • length of the route
  • serve
  • capacity
  • system expansion
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