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The charts below provide information on popular modes of transport in the city of Cambridge for the years 2008 and 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The charts below provide information on popular modes of transport in the city of Cambridge for the years 2008 and 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The pie charts beneath provide
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detailed information about well-liked forms of transportation in Cambridge, in
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 Kingdom, comparing data from a decade apart.
Overall
, we can observe
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 the inhabitants of
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 began to increasingly adopt a healthy lifestyle, giving more preference for pedestrianism and cycling.
Conversely
, a making use of cars significantly declined over the given time period. It can attributed to people's aspiration to
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environmentally-friendly
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 way of life. Taken together, the most favoured mode of movement in
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 belonged to automobiles, representing 42%.
This
 was followed by buses, accounting for nearly a third of the total. Notably, the passengers of
this
 transport remained stable during the period. On closer examination for 2018,
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bicycles and walking had
initially
 exhibited as the two least preferred options with a mere 11% and 17% respectively.
Thereafter
, the residents reaching their destination via them in 2018 had
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 nearly 15%.
Moreover
, it can be seen that the usage of these vehicles reached approximately the same position with small differences.
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