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The table below gives information about the population of New Zealand between 2011 and 2012.

The table below gives information about the population of New Zealand between 2011 and 2012.
The given table presents data on New Zealand’s
population
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 across different
age
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 groups for the years 2011 and 2012.
Overall
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, it is evident that the elderly
population
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 saw a significant increase,
while
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 other
age
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 groups experienced relatively minor changes. Notably, the 15-39
age
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group
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 constituted the largest segment of New Zealand’s
population
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 in both years. In 2011, the 15-39
age
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group
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 was the largest, with 1.52
million
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 people. The 40-64
age
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group
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 followed, comprising 1.4
million
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 people. The
population
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 of those under 15 stood at approximately 800,000,
while
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 those over 65 had the smallest
population
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 at around 500,000. Between 2011 and 2012, the
population
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 of the 15-39
age
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group
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 decreased slightly by 0.2%, to 1.5
million
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.
Similarly
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, the under-15
group
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also
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 saw a 0.2% decline, reducing its number to 800,000.
In contrast
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, the 40-64
age
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group
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 experienced a rise of 0.6%, reaching 1.46
million
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. The most notable change was in the over-65
age
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group
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, which saw a significant increase of 4%, bringing its
population
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 to 900,000.
This
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 substantial rise in the elderly
population
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 indicates a demographic shift towards an
aging
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ageing
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population
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 in New Zealand,
while
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 the other
age
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 groups showed only minor fluctuations.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, age, group, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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