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Public libraries should provide books and not waste their limited resources on expensive high-tech media sich as software, videos or DVDs. Do you agree or disagree?

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The debate over whether local
libraries
 should provide
books
 or invest in expensive hi-tech devices,
such
 as computers, software or videos.
While
 some argue that
libraries
 should focus on
books
, others believe that digital
libraries
 more demand at
this
 time. I believe that the balanced
way
 more beneficial, which integrates
books
 and
technology
 media, is the best
way
 at the current time. On the one hand, public
libraries
 should provide only
books
 and bookshelves without wasting money on
technology
.
Furthermore
, the library should save
books
 in the traditional
way
 and keep old copies of
books
 which are more valuable than other things.
Although
, traditional
libraries
 and
books
 provide things
such
 as improving concentration, and ability to focus and
also
 reduce stress.
That is
 a reason and
advantages
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 to safe public
libraries
 without hi-tech
technology
 which gives remarkable filings.
On the other hand
, there are several reasons why individuals prefer
technologies
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technology
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 over traditional
books
.
First,
people want to keep up with the digital age. Since technologies are developed day by day, which impossible to live without them.
Furthermore
, the internet can offer a range of information about everything,
such
 as, you can find
books
 from different countries, different authorities, and different languages
whereas
 public
libraries
 can not give
this
 opportunity.
This
 is one cause why hi-tech
libraries
 might be better than
traditional
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way
. In conclusion, we should keep safe traditional
libraries
an
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and
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 old
copy
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copies of
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books
 which have a good influence on the brain when we read, at the same time developed
technology
 could
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 to improve people's condition in daily routine
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  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • Finally
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