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The table shows the percentage of journeys made by different forms of transport in four countries, The bar graph shows the results of a survey into car use in Canada. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The table shows the percentage of journeys made by different forms of transport in four countries, The bar graph shows the results of a survey into car use in Canada. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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This
 report derives from the charts which enumerate the proportion of travels made by eclectic types of
transportations
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transportation
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 in four
countries
especially
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, especially
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 Canada, Belgium, Germany and
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the Netherland
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Netherland
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Netherlands
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 and delineate the consequences of a questionnaire conducted in Canada about
car
 use. A glance at the table chart clearly reveals that
overall
 trends encountered the identical result which demonstrates that a zenith ratio is recorded by the
car
 in all the observation
countries
. To be specific, the worth figures of the first chart in
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the Netherland
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Netherland
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Netherlands
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 show a remarkable difference from the other
countries
, comprising a solid 47% in the
car
 sector followed by 25% in the bicycle part.
This
 result is noticeable, considering that other
countries
such
 as Canada and Belgium possessed a firm 90% and a strong 72% each in their
car
 category.
Moreover
, the bar diagram elucidates some rationales
of
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for
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 using
car
 for a travel. "No alternative" was the main reason for Canadians to hamper them from using other options.
Also
,
"Need
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the "Need
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 for work" was another major factor that they inevitably
have
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had
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 to use a
car
 for
a travel
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travel
a journey
a trip
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.
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