The map show Southside, a shopping mall, as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
report derives from the maps which enumerate the development of Southside, a shopping mall between the present and the future.
A glance at the illustrations clearly reveals that the overall
trends of the reformation process encountered sophistication and expansion, with an elimination of the golf course which was located in
the east side of the Change preposition
on
area
. Furthermore
, by augmenting the space of the shopping mall, the facility became more spacious. In
addition
the mall will get two entrances after the renovation.
To be specific, in comparison to the present, the Add a comma
addition,
area
of the department store in the planned development possess
more larger section Correct subject-verb agreement
possesses
in
the east side.
Change preposition
on
Also
, the former narrow car park will be converted into the
huge Correct article usage
a
cark
park, removing the fitness Correct your spelling
car
center
which is located Change the spelling
centre
in
the south side of the district in Change preposition
on
the
present.
Correct article usage
apply
Moreover
, the play area
will be replaced to
the beauty salon, and the cafe below the play Change preposition
by
area
will also
be supplanted by the information center
.
Change the spelling
centre
However
, regarding that there are many variations during the reconstruction period, the future planned design still includes the supermarket with the same location in the area
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