The map show Southside, a shopping mall, as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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report derives from the maps which enumerate the development of Southside, a shopping mall between the present and the future. A glance at the illustrations clearly reveals that the

overall

trends of the reformation process encountered sophistication and expansion, with an elimination of the golf course which was located

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the east side of the

area

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, by augmenting the space of the shopping mall, the facility became more spacious.

addition

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the mall will get two entrances after the renovation. To be specific, in comparison to the present, the

area

of the department store in the planned development

possess

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more larger section

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the east side.

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, the former narrow car park will be converted into

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huge

cark

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car

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park, removing the fitness

center

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which is located

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the south side of the district in

the

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present.

Moreover

, the play

area

will be replaced

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the beauty salon, and the cafe below the play

area

will

also

be supplanted by the information

center

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However

, regarding that there are many variations during the reconstruction period, the future planned design still includes the supermarket with the same location in the

area

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