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a second or other languages
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rather
a
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mother tongue in a foreign country makes
speaker
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to
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face a lot of serious social
problems
,
besides
practical
problems
. I totally agree with
this
idea because immigrants may find it difficult to
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communications
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with others
also
they become overwhelmed
as a result
of searching for social credibility among natural
speakers
. Transferring your exact opinion
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a foreign
language
is one of the harsh experiences. Having
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good
communications
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is all about saying your opinion and showing your emotions,
however
, a
non-native
speaker
struggles with passing on.
For example
,
non-
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non-speakers
speakers
' words may lead to misunderstanding, so they get away from having a pleasant interaction.
Therefore
, a
speaker
of a foreign
language
might face social issues
such
as
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getting humiliated by native ones, feeling isolated and neglected, and becoming embarrassed. Accounting a foreign
language
speaker
as a poor stratum of society makes all of the
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weary.
Although
some
non-native
speakers
, who have acceptable occupations, have a significant social credibility and
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respect
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. If a foreign
language
speaker
goes through a shopping native
speakers
may laugh at that person because of an unusual accent. Probably, all of the foreigners are making attempts to juggle the demands of having a good social level and living as foreign people. In conclusion, speaking in
foreign
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country as a non-
speaker
has some social issues. All immigrants
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to have some difficulties for interaction and these
problems
lead to facing social issues.
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,
non-native
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do not have
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social credibility.
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last
but not least, respecting
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all
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can be a good suggestion for preventing all
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social
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