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The table below shows percentages of students with different attitudes for facilities in the university in the UK in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows percentages of students with different attitudes for facilities in the university in the UK in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table compares the percentages of
students
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 with various levels of satisfaction
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 the buildings in the university in the UK in 2008.
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,
it is clear that
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 there was no significant difference in the attitudes towards the facilities between the two
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 of
students
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. Both
undergraduates
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 and
postgraduates
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 were most satisfied with the studies
facility
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,
while
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 the cafeteria was liked by the lowest percentage of
students
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. In 2008, for the study
facility
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, the feedback of 90% of
postgraduates
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 and 85% of
undergraduates
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 were very satisfied. Less than 10%
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students
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 are quite satisfied and dissatisfied. The enjoyment of social
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facility
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facilities
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 was slightly lower, 75% of
undergraduates
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 and 65% of postgraduate
students
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 were very satisfied.
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although
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 the proportion of
postgraduates
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 not content with social
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facility
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facilities
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 was twice that of
undergraduates
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, the figures were still insignificant. Regarding
cafeteria
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the cafeteria
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, only half of
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undergraduates
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the undergraduates
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 were very satisfied, followed by 35% for those quite satisfied and 15% for dissatisfied.
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, more
postgraduates
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 had negative feelings towards it (35%) and only 40% were very satisfied.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, undergraduates, postgraduates, facility with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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