You recently stayed at your friend’s place, to look after the house while he/she is away. You accidentally damaged something in his/her house. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, you should: * describe what the accident was * explain when it happened * suggest how the damage can be fixed.
Dear friend,
I’m writing
this
letter to inform you that everything is going well, hopping
you are doing the same. I Correct your spelling
hoping
wish
your trip Verb problem
hope
in
Europe is really fun and you gained the experience you Change preposition
to
needed
.
On the one hand, I want to inform you about the house you left me to look after. All the work is done and I Wrong verb form
need
also
took care about
cleaning inside and outside the house. I live in an extremely beautiful Change preposition
of
detatched
house!
Correct your spelling
detached
On the other hand
, I'm regretting
that I wasn't Wrong verb form
I regret
attentively
enough and a little issue appeared. Your Change the word
attentive
garage's
door was locked by a worker when he was trying to clean up meticulously the indoor space. I'm upset because I wasn't looking after him when he was doing Change noun form
garage
this
stuff, but it's on me, I will get it fixed.
Yesterday, all day long I was looking for a qualified person who could help me. Tomorrow morning he will be at your place and the door will be repaired. This
person is a very good friend of mine, we were together in high school and now he works as a technician. And because you
door is working on electricity, he will manage to get everything fixed.
Sorry again and I'm waiting for your response.
Best regards, your friend.Change the pronoun
your
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task achievement
The letter overall addresses all parts of the task, but try to make your explanation a bit clearer about which part of the house was damaged initially. Also, ensure to describe the accident thoroughly.
coherence cohesion
While the letter follows a logical structure, improving the transitions between paragraphs would make the letter more coherent and easier to follow.
task achievement
Though the letter has a friendly tone, further refinement in the vocabulary would elevate the writing to sound more natural and suitable for a letter to a friend.
coherence cohesion
Avoid jumping between different topics in the same paragraph. Each main idea should ideally have its own paragraph to enhance clarity.
coherence cohesion
The letter adequately opens and closes with appropriate greetings and closing remarks which fits well with the intended tone.
task achievement
The letter covers all required details: the description of the accident, the timing, and a solution for fixing the damage.
task achievement
Commitment to resolving the problem and the proactive approach to fix the issue is well portrayed, demonstrating a responsible tone.