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In many parts of the world, people are choosing to have fewer children.

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In many parts of the world
families
 gradually experienced fewer
children
 than
previous
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 years. There are various reasons that impact
to
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this
 trend tremendously and
this
 essay will discuss the reasons
of
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this
 tendency and its impacts on society. It should be noted that having fewer
children
 in
the
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families
have
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 various reasons.
Firstly
, the education and knowledge levels of the couple heavily influence their family planning decisions. More educated couples tend to have fewer
children
 as they are aware of the cost and responsibility each child brings.
Additionally
, raising a child takes an immense amount of time and resources which many people nowadays simply don’t have, largely
due to
 demanding jobs. Women entering the workforce has meant that twice as many people are competing for the same number of job positions, which halves wages and
therefore
 no longer
can
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one man
support
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 a whole family.
On the other hand
, having fewer
children
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 negative effects
over
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the
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society. The major disadvantages of having fewer
children
is
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 lack of companionship and lack of support and care when senior members of
families
 are getting older, and missing the experience of parenthood. Especially when
children
are
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leaving their
families
due to
 their education and
works
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 the remained family members
obtain
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 depression.
Also
the
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society
lose
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 its manpower which affects the industry as
older
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the older
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 generation are not willing to spend most of their time in
workplace
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the workplace
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.
To sum up
, in modern life more
families
 consider having fewer
children
 and allocating their care to pets and other hobbies. Some people assume that having
less
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 infants is vulnerable as
less
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 resources will be consumed but decreasing the number of young generations can have negative impacts on the industry of the world. Samir Nabiyev
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task achievement
Consider providing more specific examples to support your points. For example, mention specific countries or studies that illustrate the trend of having fewer children.
task achievement
Work on expanding some ideas to provide a fuller response. For example, discuss how government policies or economic factors are influencing family planning.
coherence cohesion
Try to maintain clearer connections between sentences and paragraphs. Use transition words and phrases more effectively to guide the reader through your argument.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion. The reader can easily understand the structure and flow of the argument.
coherence cohesion
The main points are generally supported with reasoning, making the overall argument fairly compelling.
task achievement
The essay addresses both reasons for the trend and its impacts on society, providing a balanced perspective.

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