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The graph below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 graph illustrates the number of movies produced by five different countries during the
years
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 2007,2008 and 2009.
This
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 graph clearly explains that
country
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 A has the most
films
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 produced compared to all the other countries across all three
years
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. For
country
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 A the
years
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 2007 and 2008 were more or less the same in numbers but there was a slight decline in the
year
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 2009.
On the other hand
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, the least number of
films
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 produced was by
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 E and there is a dramatic difference between
country
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 A and
country
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 E.
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, throughout those
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country
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 E didn't achieve to produce more than 15
films
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 a
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. The
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 2009 seems to be the best
year
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 in the film production industry as in most countries
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country
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 D has had the biggest number of
films
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 produced in that
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.
To conclude
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, there is a huge gap between one
country
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 and the next when it comes to the total of film production in each
year
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.
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Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, country, films, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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