You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job.You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend.In your letter •say why he/she would not enjoy going to college •explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her •suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her
Hi Nilu,
I hope you are doing well. I am writing in order to give you some useful advice that might be helpful for your future
I am thankful that you believed me and asked for help. I will not highly recommend you to study at college
due to
It is a waste of time. Moreover
, I know that you are more interested in career
than learning some skills at college. Add an article
a career
Also
, it is so challenging to talk to strangers especially
Add the comma(s)
, especially
at
Uzbekistan.
I thoroughly advise you Change preposition
in
to
to get a well-paid job which is beneficial for you. Change preposition
apply
Firstly
, you will be able to purchase anything you want. Secondly
, you will not spend your time at
fruitless activities Change preposition
on
such
as,
playing video games or watching TV programs. Remove the comma
apply
Thirdly
, you can buy plenty of useful courses.
I suggest you to
take Remove the particle
apply
a
place of Correct article usage
the
IT
Correct article usage
an IT
jobs
. Fix the agreement mistake
job
For instance
, programming, marketing, web
designing. If you choose one of them you will not regret. I am giving friendly advice that Correct word choice
and web
are
functional for you.
Looking forward to your quick reply.
With love
MohinurChange the verb form
is
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coherence cohesion
Organize your ideas into clear, distinct paragraphs. For example, one paragraph for why college isn't suitable, another for the benefits of getting a job, and a third for job suggestions.
task achievement
Try to expand and elaborate on your points about why college would not be enjoyable. This will make your argument more convincing.
task achievement
Be careful with small grammatical errors and word choices, for example: 'I will not highly recommend' should be 'I do not highly recommend'.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is friendly and supportive, which is very suitable for this type of task.
coherence cohesion
You provided a clear conclusion with a friendly encouragement for a reply, which nicely closes the letter.
The Closing
The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.
Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.
Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)
- Yours faithfully,
Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)
- Yours sincerely,
Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)
- Best regards,
- Warm wishes,
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