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the line graph below shows the main reasons people gave for moving away from a particular capital city to the countryside.

the line graph below shows the main reasons people gave for moving away from a particular capital city to the countryside.
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The graph depicts information on three significant causes
people
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 demonstrated for the migration from a major city to a rural area. As can be seen, all three reasons showed an increasing
trend
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 during a period of 20 years between 1990 and 2010. Compared to the other two reasons, the rising cost of living was always considered the most common one among
people
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 during the 20-year period. In 1990, around 65000 immigrants had
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 reason. The
number
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 grew steadily until it reached more than 85000 in 2000 which is actually the peak
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 for all included factors in all time.
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, the
trend
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 changed from 2000 and mildly decreased until it got to 80000 in 2010 which still was higher than the point the
trend
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 started in 1990. In terms of the other two reasons,
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 traffic was a little bit more common among the
people
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, both traffic and lifestyle showed a similar pattern during the period of 20 years. In 1990, the
number
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 of
people
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 who shared the same opinion about the issue of traffic was approximately 20000.
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 amount rose gradually close to 35000 by the year 2000, and
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 sharply climbed to 60000 in 2010.
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, regarding the matter of lifestyle, a steady
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 is evident. In 1990, about 20000 individuals held the same view on
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 reason.
This
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number
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 progressively reached about 40000.
To sum up
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, as
this
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 graph displays the major causes
people
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 explained for moving away from a big city to the countryside, all three causes exhibited an increasing tendency from 1990 to 2000.
While
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 the rising cost of living illustrated a decline from 2000 to 2010, still it was higher than its starting point.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, trend, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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