the graph below gives information about car ownership in Britain from 1971 to 2007.

the graph below gives information about car ownership in Britain from 1971 to 2007.
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The line chart illustrates the proportion of families
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car
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a car
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in
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Britain between 1971 and 2007.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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the ones who had no
car
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and had
two
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cars
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have changed dramatically.
while
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another
two
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groups remained steady in the given period.
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with, the proportion of families with
two
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cars
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grew drastically from the first period to the end, about 9% to approximately 27%, respectively. on the opposite, the percentage of individuals that did not
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decreased sharply from just under 50% to 25% in 2007. the people with one
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Great Britain remained by a little bit changes. the trend started at about 40% in 1971 and finished near 41%.
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, the people who had three or more
cars
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had the same trend as the ones who had one
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. For those
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trend began
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at
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1% at first and ended
by
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about 8%. In fact,
this
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group have had a little change.
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,
two
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groups of one
car
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and three or more
cars
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had the same situation.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words car, two, cars with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • household
  • trend
  • fluctuate
  • increase
  • decrease
  • ownership
  • period
  • peak
  • dip
  • noteworthy
  • consistent
  • dramatic
  • highlight
  • significant
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