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The chart shows the results of surveys in one African country asking teenagers the main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the results of surveys in one African country asking teenagers the main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates a survey result of asking teenagers about the main reasons behind them using their
Use synonyms
phone
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phones
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 between 2016 and 2019 in one of the African countries. The shown reasons are social
networks
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, email, digital
camera
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cameras
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, and
phone
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 calls. At
first,
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social
networks
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 rank
the
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apply
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first
between
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among
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 all other causes in all years from 2016 to 2019. In 2016, it took fifty
percent
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per cent
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, exactly
the
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apply
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half, of the phones usages.
While
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,
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apply
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 emails took
quarter
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a quarter
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. Social
Networks
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 got less in 2017 than
2016
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in 2016
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.
However
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, the
phone
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 calls
reason takes
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took
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 the lowest place in
the
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apply
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teenagers
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teenager's
teenagers'
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 usage between 2016 and 2019. Emails declined a year after the other without rising.
Adding
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Additionally
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, digital cameras were used in the same amount in 2016 and 2017. After, climbed to a tiny rise in the percentage in 2018 and 2019. The
phone
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 calls climbed from 2016 to 2017
,
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apply
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 but
then
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 fell in 2018 and 2019. Over all years, social
networks
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 in 2019
was
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were
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 the highest.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words phone, networks with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "climbed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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