The diagram below gives the information about the Hawaiian island chain in the centre of the Pacific Ocean. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown.

The diagram below gives the information about the Hawaiian island chain in the centre of the Pacific Ocean. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown.
The given figure represents
the
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detailed information about the Hawaiian
island
chain which
present
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in the
center
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of
Pacific
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the Pacific
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Ocean
. Hawaiian
island
had the oldest
volcano
in the
last
80m years, which has
few
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a few
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other major islands situated nearby in and around 100kms. Every year, about 7-9 cm of shifts
that
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happen in
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the pacific
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pacific
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Pacific
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plate towards the Hawaiian
island
from one side of the
ocean
, which will cause the earth to develop
the
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a
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young
volcano
which is built up by numerous amounts of eruptions that
occurs
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. Below is the ‘Hot spot’ which remains static in nature. The eruption process
which
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develops under the
ocean
level of 2883
kms
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km
down from the sea level where the eruption process begins and continues to create a small
volcano
over the sea by crossing the
pacific
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plate and
creates
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a tectonic
pacific
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Pacific
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plate shift. To report that every year, a small or youngest
volcano
have been developing under the
ocean
level- it can be either a
volcano
or
island
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an island
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.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words island, ocean, volcano with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • geographical position
  • Pacific Ocean
  • diagram
  • volcanic activity
  • hot spot theory
  • tectonic plate
  • stationary
  • Earth's mantle
  • sequential
  • evolution
  • active volcanism
  • erosion
  • subsidence
  • atolls
  • seamounts
  • topography
  • ecological development
  • significant
  • historical
  • cultural importance
  • ongoing natural processes
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