Some believe that people should make efforts to fight climate change while others think it is better to learn to live with it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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The introduction lacks clarity and contains several grammatical errors. It would benefit from restating the topic clearly and outlining the structure of the essay.

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The essay is incomplete and does not fully discuss either viewpoint. Ensure to discuss both views in detail to provide a balanced argument.

coherence cohesion

The essay lacks coherence and logical structure. Paragraphs should be well-organized with clear topic sentences. Transitional phrases can improve the flow of ideas.

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There's no clear conclusion present in the text. Summarize the main points and state your opinion clearly at the end of the essay.

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The essay attempts to address both sides of the argument, which is a good start.

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Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

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Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Lexical resource: 5.0

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Grammatical Range: 5.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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3 paragraphs

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Topic Vocabulary:

climate change
mitigate
renewable energy
afforestation
sustainable practices
extreme weather events
carbon emissions
infrastructure
agricultural practices
moral responsibility
ecosystems
green jobs
economic growth
job losses
poverty alleviation
quality of life
proactive measures
balanced approach
green technology
unavoidable impacts

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