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The pie chart illustrates the number of people who visited movie theaters in the year 2000 according to their age groups.

The pie chart illustrates the number of people who visited movie theaters in the year 2000 according to their age groups.
The pie chart depicts the number of people who visited movie
theaters
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 in the year 2000, categorized by
age
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groups
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. The most significant trend is the high proportion of older
cinema
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-goers, with those aged 55 and over representing the largest
group
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.
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, individuals aged 31 to 45 comprised the smallest percentage of
cinema
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visitors
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. The 55 and over
age
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group
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 accounted for 51% of
cinema
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 attendees in 2000. The second largest
group
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 was the 10-15
age
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group
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, representing 21%. Individuals aged 16-20 made up 15% of
cinema
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visitors
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 in 2000. The 31-45
age
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group
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 had the lowest percentage, with only 5% of
cinema
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visitors
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. The 21-30
age
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group
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 had a relatively low attendance, accounting for just 3% of
visitors
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, group, cinema, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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