The pie chart illustrates the number of people who visited movie theaters in the year 2000 according to their age groups.

The pie chart illustrates the number of people who visited movie theaters in the year 2000 according to their age groups.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The pie chart depicts the number of people who visited movie
theaters
Change the spelling
theatres
show examples
in the year 2000, categorized by
age
Use synonyms
groups
Fix the agreement mistake
group
show examples
. The most significant trend is the high proportion of older
cinema
Use synonyms
-goers, with those aged 55 and over representing the largest
group
Use synonyms
.
Conversely
Linking Words
, individuals aged 31 to 45 comprised the smallest percentage of
cinema
Use synonyms
visitors
Use synonyms
. The 55 and over
age
Use synonyms
group
Use synonyms
accounted for 51% of
cinema
Use synonyms
attendees in 2000. The second largest
group
Use synonyms
was the 10-15
age
Use synonyms
group
Use synonyms
, representing 21%. Individuals aged 16-20 made up 15% of
cinema
Use synonyms
visitors
Use synonyms
in 2000. The 31-45
age
Use synonyms
group
Use synonyms
had the lowest percentage, with only 5% of
cinema
Use synonyms
visitors
Use synonyms
. The 21-30
age
Use synonyms
group
Use synonyms
also
Linking Words
had a relatively low attendance, accounting for just 3% of
visitors
Use synonyms
.
Submitted by weezel on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, group, cinema, visitors with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
What to do next:
Look at other essays: